User blog comment:IzzyK/I WROTE A POEM! ANYONE READING THIS ON RECENT CHANGES CLICK ON THIS IMEDIATELY! SHOW YOUR FRIENDS!/@comment-1204060-20090829030123

...I have to agree with Jose here. It's hard to read, and it really isn't poetry. Plus, it's pretty random. Which is a little bit of a bad thing when it comes to writing pieces. As for rhyming...maybe you could try writing it in a format in which you don't need to rhyme, like a sonnet or a haiku. That may be easier for you, as it gives you guidelines to follow.

Although...something being "better" than something else is an opinion, and, thus, it cannot be a proven fact, but still, I'm siding with Jose on this one.