Thread:AnonymousRose94/@comment-25397397-20141106233734/@comment-24781217-20150102032526

Okay, done. You are getting better at characterizations, great job with that, but be careful about staying consistent. In particular, Scarlett said "Yippee!" She would never say that unless she was being sarcastic. Also, Amy would never call Samey "Sammy." She doesn't have any respect for her to do that.

You've also done really well with adding more HTF. I'm glad to see that! Thanks for following my suggestion!

Just a couple other things. One, I think when the eliminated contestants vote someone off, it shouldn't be revealed until the next episode. It adds to the surprise factor, you know? Also, with Jasmine being eliminated, I understand the concept of Amy wanting Sammy to be hated by the others, but how did she convince everyone to vote Jasmine off? How did she get people on her side? Things like that need to be explained, otherwise it makes it obvious that a writer is making all this up, instead of these situations happening themselves. :)