Thread:AnonymousRose94/@comment-25397397-20141106233734/@comment-24781217-20150119032900

Yep! That's fine!

My only major thing with this group is that, try to make the reasons why the eliminated person was eliminated a little more obvious. It bothered me how all but one person voted for Dakota when there was really no reason for everyone to go against her. Same with Jasmine. It still doesn't sit right with me how Amy and Courtney convinced everybody so easily to vote her off. Everyone loves twists, but they do need to be set up in a way that makes the situation believable to the reader. For instance, maybe Amy and Courtney blackmailed some people into voting for Jasmine?

Other than that, all I see is some breaks of character every now and again. If I may ask, have you read any other TD fanfiction? Reading others' work can help with improving your own.