Thread:ArtDraw12/@comment-34330205-20180616233047/@comment-11883116-20180617093653

Why would it sound rude?

I checked it. Interesting ideas, some better than canon. I see you and I had some common ideas.

Duncan vs. Gwen is among my choices for TDI's best final 2 as well. Lindsay seems to be eliminated kinda early, but I guess it's alright since you made Heather's alliance with Duncan more plot relevant.

As for my tips:
 * You may want to add pictures to make it more visually appealing.
 * Explain Lindsay's elimination better. It's worded in confusing way and doesn't really explain how she got eliminated.